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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the percentage of citizens in
Yemen
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 and
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Italia
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Italy
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 based on three
age
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 groups and projections for 2050.
Overall
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,
while
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people
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 under 14
years
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 accounted for the majority of the population of
Yemen
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, most Italians were
at
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the
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age
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of
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15- 59
years
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. It is predicted that the populations of two both countries will become older in 2050. In 2000,
people
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 in the 0-14
age
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 group comprised
a
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half of the population of
Yemen
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while
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 Italians in the same bracket just took up 14,3%.
On the contrary
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,
people
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 at the
age
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 of 15-59 in
Yemen
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 made up 46,3%
while
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 in
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Italia
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Italy
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 the percentage of
people
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 in
this
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age
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 bracket was nearly
two thirds
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, at 61,6%.
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, residents over 60
years
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 old in
Yemen
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 constituted the minority of its population at 3,6%
while
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 the proportion of
this
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age
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 group in
Italia
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 was nearly a quarter. In 2050, It is estimated that
people
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 below 14
years
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 old in both
Yemen
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 and
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Italia
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Italy
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 will decrease to reach 37% and 11,5% respectively
while
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 citizens over 60
years
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 in the two countries will ascend to hit 5,7% and 42,3% each. Meanwhile,
people
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 in the middle
age
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 group
is
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are
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 predicted to rise to reach more than
a
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half, at 57,3% in
Yemen
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 and drop to hit 46,2% in
Italia
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, italia, age, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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