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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One should never judge a person by external appearances. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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Although
 not being hotly debated, fair standards to assess people has never been overlooked. Some are of the notion that outward images should not be a criterion for any judgments. To my own way of thinking, I am the advocate of
this
 viewpoint to some extent for reasons as follows. To equate individuals’ external appearances with a scale for their personalities is inequitable. There is no denying that outward appearances are deeply
contigent
a gathering of persons representative of some larger group
contingent
 on economic backgrounds of themselves.
In other words
, the more gorgeously a person gets dressed, the more affluent he is. Hardly is to make judgments based on
this
 criterion fair for those who are coping with monetary burdens, as they are now unable to afford basic needs, let alone
such
 non-essential things. It is unreasonable to juxtapose a person with undesired personalities via their low frequency to adorn themselves with sparkling costumes.
Moreover
, external appearances can be known as one’s miens which are inborn. A person who has a pretty face and wears beautiful clothes may not have the same kind of heart expected.
Therefore
, people utilizing
this
 scale to assess
qualities
Suggestion
the qualities
 of others are unlikely to understand truly about ones’ qualities.
Nevertheless
, despite several factors related to
economy
Suggestion
the economy
, people are still capable of preparing for their casual look, for the sake of better miens. By tidying up themselves, living with a healthier style, it is irrefutable that their external appearances do make a great improvement, thereby preventing any smallest chances of others’ criticism It is
also
 advisable that people can perfect themselves in the way they behave towards others
such
 as communications among people. A saying goes: “Teeth and hair are the most important when it comes to appearance”, which urges people to take care of their appearances more. By getting good appearances, they can cherish themselves
first
,
then
 show their respect for other surrounding people and
consequently
, getting a good impression on others’ minds. To recapitulate, a scale of external appearances holds no merits when
such
 aspects can not mirror ones’ personalities fairly and vividly.
However
, it is suggested that people should
tpay
Suggestion
t pay
 more attention to their outward images.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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