You have recently made a purchase from the local department store. However, when you arrived home, you found a fault awith it. Write a letter to the manager, say what product is, explain the problem and say what you’d like to be done about it.

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Dear Sir, Happy Saturday! I am writing

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letter to express my dissatisfaction towards the product which I bought from your store. I think you will take

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matter seriously. The product which I bought from your "Winners" store is

long

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a long

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winter

coat

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on 16th November. I bought DKNY

woolen

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woollen

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coat

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as I searched about

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brand and

ofcourse

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of course

I gave

the

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apply

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priority to the quality as well. It cost me around

me around

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apply

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89.99 plus taxes at that time. Unfortunately, the features of

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item

was

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were

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not the same as I expected. On the website, you mentioned that it is warmer and can

be wear

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be worn

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in -20

temperature

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but the reality is different because of the inferior quality of

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coat

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in-store.

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, the inside zip of the

coat

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is not functioning well. I want you to refund me

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the

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full amount of

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coat

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plus taxes or

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if you offer me

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other winter

coat

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then

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it would be an ideal idea. I hope you will retain your customer's trust on your customer by providing better service. I hope to hear back from you soon. Yours Faithfully, Sam.

kaurjagdeep2097Sat Nov 23 2024

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single idea per paragraph

Ensure that each paragraph conveys a single distinct idea for better clarity and impact.

logical structure

Maintain a logical flow in your argument by ensuring that each part of the letter follows logically from one to the next.

complete response

The letter effectively conveys the main task, with detailed descriptions of the product and the issues encountered.

suitable writing tone

The tone is formal and polite, suitable for such a request to a manager.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

191 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

purchase
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You have recently made a purchase from the local department store. However, when you arrived home, you found a fault awith it. Write a letter to the manager, say what product is, explain the problem and say what you’d like to be done about it.

Nowadays many elderly people live alone and this can cause a variety of problems for society. What are some of these problems and what solutions can you suggest?

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Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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