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Some people believe that to reduce the amount of time people spend travelling to work, parks and gardens close to city centres should be replaced with apartment buildings for commuters to live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Transportation takes up a huge amount of
time
 in the daily routine for a majority of citizens. There are those who hold the opinion that to shorten travel
time
 government should
replace green
Suggestion
replace with green
 zones around of business
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 by blocks of flats for those employees who labour there. I totally disagree that
such
 action is
necessary
Suggestion
Necessary
 to solve the travel-
time
 problem, because it could have a serious negative effect on people’s health and environment in general. The main reason why more than half of the workers are positive about living a stone's throw away from their
work places
a place where work is done
workplaces
 is that in
this
 case they would save more than two hours per day to get place of
work
. Definitely, it could help to balance their lives between
work
 and leisure, but at the same
time
 has a lot of drawbacks.
For example
, recent scientific researches have shown, that employees who
work
 near green spaces are 23% more efficient than those who
work
 far from the garden, because trees produce oxygen which helps human's nervous system resists stress.
Moreover
, the woods are balance air pollution in cities.
Therefore
, humanity should take care about forests and prevent disturbance of the natural balance as much as possible because deforestation have a knock-on-effect which leads to global warming and air pollution.
For instance
, China faced with the lack of green places 5 years ago and for today citizens' life expectancy has fallen dramatically. At the same
time
, illnesses
such
 as heart diseases and asthma have risen.
As a result
, Chinese authorities create park everywhere, including the roofs of skyscrapers and appeal the population to
work
 from home to reduce traffic jams. In conclusion, the question of replacement green spaces by accommodation buildings is a difficult one to answer definitively, but based on reasons analysed above, I believe that citizens shouldn't destroy parks only to reduce transportation
time
to
Suggestion
in
 their works, because there are a lot of disadvantages which affect not only on human but on the planet's climate in general.
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