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Lifestyle and culture are in different countries is becoming similar. What do you think? Is it a positive development or negative development?

Nowadays, The world has become a global village due to technological advancements, globalization and westernization and it leads to equality in
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 and
culture
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 in different countries as developing nations are adopting the
lifestyle
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 and
culture
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 of developed nations. As per my view, It is not completely a negative development just we need to preserve the
culture
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, traditions, as well as customs of each nation.
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 with, Race of adopting
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lifestyle
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a lifestyle
the lifestyle
 of another
country
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 leads to the loss of indigenous
culture
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, tradition, customs and
lifestyle
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. These were developed several millennia ago and suit to the specific
country
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. So, adopting another
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country's
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country
lifestyle
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 and customs might not be suitable for people living in that
country
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. For an Instance, In
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country
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a country
 like India it is better to consume vegetarian food and wear cotton clothes as it is having hot climate. While in western countries they consume non-vegetarian food and wear woollen clothes because of its cold climate.
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 to that, fossil fuel usage in the USA is far greater than that of India. To add into
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, Diversity enhances the innovations, Different
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 and lifestyles provide a completely different perspective towards life. That's why school and colleges should prefer to increase in diversity. Diversity in
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 and
culture
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 generates a unique national identity and it should be preserved. As because of that discrepancy
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 is able to attract tourism along with foreign money.
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, Due to conformity in
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 and
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culture people
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culture, people
 can easily migrate to another
country
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 with less challenges in terms of languages,
lifestyle
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 and
culture
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. It
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also diminish
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also diminishes
has also diminished
 the discrimination based on race, nationality and style of clothing. To recapitulate, equality in
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 and customs between several
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country
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countries
 is not completely negative until the citizen's of specific
country
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 able to preserve their own
culture
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 and customs.

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