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Lifestyle and culture are in different countries is becoming similar. What do you think? Is it a positive development or negative development?

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Nowadays, The world has become a global village due to technological advancements, globalization and westernization and it leads to equality in
lifestyle
 and
culture
 in different countries as developing nations are adopting the
lifestyle
 and
culture
 of developed nations. As per my view, It is not completely a negative development just we need to preserve the
culture
, traditions, as well as customs of each nation.
To begin
 with, Race of adopting
lifestyle
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a lifestyle
the lifestyle
 of another
country
 leads to the loss of indigenous
culture
, tradition, customs and
lifestyle
. These were developed several millennia ago and suit to the specific
country
. So, adopting another
country's
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country
lifestyle
 and customs might not be suitable for people living in that
country
. For an Instance, In
country
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a country
 like India it is better to consume vegetarian food and wear cotton clothes as it is having hot climate. While in western countries they consume non-vegetarian food and wear woollen clothes because of its cold climate.
In addition
 to that, fossil fuel usage in the USA is far greater than that of India. To add into
this
, Diversity enhances the innovations, Different
culture
 and lifestyles provide a completely different perspective towards life. That's why school and colleges should prefer to increase in diversity. Diversity in
lifestyle
 and
culture
 generates a unique national identity and it should be preserved. As because of that discrepancy
country
 is able to attract tourism along with foreign money.
On the other hand
, Due to conformity in
lifestyle
 and
culture people
Accept comma addition
culture, people
 can easily migrate to another
country
 with less challenges in terms of languages,
lifestyle
 and
culture
. It
also diminish
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also diminishes
has also diminished
 the discrimination based on race, nationality and style of clothing. To recapitulate, equality in
lifestyle
 and customs between several
country
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countries
 is not completely negative until the citizen's of specific
country
 able to preserve their own
culture
 and customs.
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