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Some people believe that students at university should live far away from home while others argue living at home with their parents sounds better. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

#people #students #university #home #parents
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Over recent years, whether it is better for
university
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students
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 to live far away from
home
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 than to live at
home
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 with their parents remains a highly debatable issue.
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 there are pros and cons of both approaches, I would prefer to stay near the
university
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. Advocates of
students
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’ decision to stay at
home
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 may argue that it is much more economical to stay at
home
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 than to stay near the
university
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. If
students
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 choose to stay at the
university
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, either they have to stay at the dormitory or rent their own apartment, both of which options appear to be more expensive compared to
home
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.
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, they have to do their own cooking and cleaning which is not the case if they stay at
home
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 where their mother looks after all these things. Of course, they do spend some time commuting to and from the
university
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 but
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 they can save their time on cooking and cleaning.
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, it seems to me that staying near the
university
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 is a better option because I believe that
university
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 education is a time for
students
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 to mix with people of different backgrounds and cultures.
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 cultural exchange usually occurs after class hours. If
students
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 have to return
home
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, they will miss out on
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 golden opportunity.
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, if
students
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 are on or near the campus, they will not be able to access good study facilities
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 as
library
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 and computer lab.
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, living on campus will
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 offer
students
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 a chance to experience some independence. In conclusion, I would argue that it is definitely worthwhile to live at the
university
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 than with parents even if we have to shell out some extra money for that because it is a golden opportunity to interact with people
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differentparts
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different parts
 of the world and enjoy the benefits of facilities like the library and sports stadiums and gyms.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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