Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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, in Okinawa, there are many beautiful white sand beaches and specific wild animals.

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visiting and building of hotels

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local wild animals and tourists can stay

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places in natural environment and local

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.5

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Relevant & specific examples

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5 paragraphs

251 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Economic growth
Cultural dilution
Environmental degradation
Responsible tourism
Ecotourism
Cultural conservation
Habitat destruction
Sustainable practices
Cultural exchange
Commercialization of cultural sites
Cultural heritage
Local ecosystems

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Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination, while other think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Dicss both view and give our opinion

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to only be meant for adults. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes, and what solutions can be offered?

More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?