Main Topic: Some people think that schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the Internet while others believe that nothing can replace physical classrooms with direct guidance from teachers.Discuss both views( and give your own opinion).

Nowadays, some people believe that students can get so much
information
through the
internet
instead
of going to
school
,
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others think that teachers and
school
are really important in everyone’s learning so nothing can replace them.From my point of view
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it’s better for students to learn in
physical
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physics
classes with direct guidance from teachers. On the one of argument
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there are people who hold the opinion that learning online will get better results.The most compelling reasons for believing that a giant search engine on
internet
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students can easily search new knowledge which is updated
everyday
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every day
in favour of
student’s learning
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a student’s learning
the student’s learning
.At the click of a button
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students can get more
informations
a message received and understood
information
in a short
time
instead
of wasting a lot of
time
scanning through
text book
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text books
a text book
.
In addition
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learning online is one of the ways help
them
people in general
they
can learn at their own pace to adapt to each student’s skill level.
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refers to the speaker or writer
I
cannot deny that a virtual
class
is more and more popular in 4.0 era.
Nevertheless
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online learning brings many disadvantages to students.
Firstly
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Internet
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the Internet
is a giant search engine which helps students get more
information
about different field.
However
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not all
information
are authenticated
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is authenticated
.Today
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there are more and more fake
information
invades on
internet
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the internet
which affects negative on the reader.Especially
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students who don’t have sound aware of choosing
information
.
Moreover
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the cost of studying online is more expensive than the cost of physical classrooms
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which is not affordability by some people.
On the other hand
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other
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the other
still believe that there is no substitute for
school
and teachers in everyone’s learning.The main reasons why people tend to support a traditional
class
is that
time
face to face interaction between students and teachers are ensured in order to help teachers supervise students more easily.
hence
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Hence
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teachers can know the level of each
students
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student
to
offers
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offer
solutions which helps them in having a good academic performance.
In
addition at
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addition, at
physical
class
activities are organized to help students develop themselves in all
respect
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respects
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such
as developing interaction and group skills
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extension relationship,.. Only when studying at
school
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can students participate in curriculum activities with friends
instead
of playing online games.Example
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in the fact that there are more and more activities are
implused
set forth authoritatively as obligatory
imposed
at
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on
school
to enhance the development of students and prepare students for the future.
Besides
, many benefits traditional
class
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classes
brings
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bring
to students
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,
physical
class
still have some disadvantages.Nowadays,
school
still teach through text- books
instead
of using
computer
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a computer
or smart devices.It’s one of the major inadequacies in
student’s learning
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the student’s learning
.Most types of books for students are not constantly updated
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therefore students
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therefore, students
having difficulty accessing to new
information
.
Secondly
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learning at
school
is depend
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depends
on timetable of
school which
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school, which
makes difficult for students to be proactive.Example
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now a student is very busy with the study
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and she
want
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wants
to spend
time
at weekend to learn
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
.But the
school
don’t have
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doesn’t have
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
class
at the weekend as she
want
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wants
.So she should arrange
time according
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time, according
to timetable if she
want
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wants
to learn
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
at
school
. Learning online and learning at
school
have their own advantages and disadvantages.In my opinion
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study
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the study
at
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of
physical
class
considers popular and bring much better results.In high mountain area
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where is poor
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the quality of life is low and people don’t have opportunities approach to technology.
Hence
, learning online has been deemed difficult with them.Very few
family
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families
has conditions to buy smart devices in order to prepare for the learning on
internet
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the internet
.
Therefore
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living conditions only allow them to go to
school
.In my opinion
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,
although
online learning is growing
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,
but
school
and teachers cannot be replaced by nothing. In conclusions, learning on
internet
is more and more popular than
physical
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a physical class
class
in 4.0 era,but having said that,online
class
still have many drawback
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