Some people think parents should not encourage children to do part-time jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Nowadays, in our over consumptive society, working plays a vital role in our's and our family's sustaining. Due to

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ever increasing importance, some parents send their children to work part-time in their teenage years, while others argue that

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course of action is not beneficial for their child. In my opinion working from a young age is very important. In

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essay I will discuss both views.

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, the benefits for the young one and the family are numerous. At

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glance, because of the money that the teenager will be collecting, through his hard-earned labour, it will give him the feel of being independent and help him realise what is waiting for him in the future.

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, due to the above, the individual will, in most cases

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mature faster

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with multiple positive outcomes for him. To illustrate, from my own experience being employed in a restaurant from the age of 15, I had the chance to view the world with a different eye and make better and more mature decisions in my life,

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as following a career in medicine.

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, the payout of his job can help out his parents, so that they can have more economic freedom.

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, there are some negative views on

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case.

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of all, part-time labour can accumulate most of the free-time that teenagers have to either study or have extracurricular activities.

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, some students might see a decrease in their grades and disregard their future, while

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, the lack of hobbies might affect their mental stability.

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, a study carried out by the University of Cambridge, showed that, children that have a lack of leisure activities have a 10% more likely to be depressed in the future.

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, the fatigue, due to the workload and lack of sleep can

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affect his school performance. In conclusion, having a part-time job as a youngster has positive and negative aspects to it. But, it's my firm belief that, with the correct monitoring from the youngster's parents

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it can help him prosper in his life.

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