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Universities should accept equal members of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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An essence of
education
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 has raised exorbitantly for all the members of the
society
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. Many intellectuals reckon that the educational institutes should encourage equal share of boys and girls in each subject. I strongly agree with the above notion to eradicate the gender discrimination from the community and to provide the fair opportunities to all.
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 with, the equal indulgence of women is a predominant sign of the developing
society
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. The rudimentary right of
education
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 would keen to uplift the standard of living of the people. The avail of equal opportunity to learn would make the female independent and self-reliant.
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, the influence of the social vices will fade up, as well as bring the prosperity to the community.
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, the survey of the researchers had revealed that, the females have proved them as successful professionals with ample of opportunities.
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, the enhancement of the civilization relies on a policy of mandatory
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education to
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education, to
 equal numbers of men and women.
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, the development of citizens in the balanced way would bring harmony and peace in the
society
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. There were innumerable offences in the societies. To curb these threats, universities and the regime should promote them for higher
education
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 and prepare them to raise their voice.
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, the elevated literacy level of the female would mould them to fight against the potential injustice to them.
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, the new policy of encouraging the woman of
education
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 will be lucrative to them. In conclusion, the equality in the enrolment at university for the men and women will convert the dynamic
society
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. I welcome
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 revolutionary change in the community. The local authority should promote
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 practices.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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