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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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Some individuals learn a foreign
language
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 in order to live abroad. Unfortunately, they encounter with practical and social issues. I strongly agree with
this
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 view, and I will provide arguments and examples in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, knowing a
language
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 would be beneficial while working.
However
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, when a person has to converse with locals, they may face a problem.
Furthermore
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, they hardly talk to local people and have little idea about the cultural diversity of the country. But, if a person doesn't know the
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, he/she come across with the problem of making new friends.
As a result
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this
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 situation may cause people to feel alone or excluded from the social life.
For example
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: a couple months from knowing I heard about my cousin, who had been abroad. It is said that, she hardened by not being able to talk with locals.
Besides
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 that, not knowing the
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 makes it harder for immigrants to find a direction, read important notices, order food from the menu, talk to local citizen to help and most importantly manage a job. It is quite natural than an employer would prefer someone who can communicate with people of the country and
language
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 barrier, according to many immigrants, is the leading cause they remain unemployed. Taking everything into consideration, before migrating to a country, people should know their local's
language
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 in order to be able to speak fluently.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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