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The best way to resolve the international environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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International experts have proposed many solutions to tackle global environmental issues. While raising
fuel
 prices would be a useful measure to fight climate change, I disagree that it would represent the best way to alleviate environmental problems. National authorities should raise taxes on the cost of
fuel
. By adopting
this
 policy, governments would almost certainly ensure that people used their cars less. Fewer car journeys would mean a reduction in exhaust emissions.
This
 would have global consequences, slowing the process of global warming as the quantity of greenhouse gases released into the atmosphere was reduced.In terms of the depletion of natural resources, world supplies of oil will not
last
 forever, and by increasing petrol prices there would be less dependence on fossil fuels.
Thus
, I believe that international bodies should exert pressure on countries to raise
fuel
 prices.
However
, I would argue that there are more effective ways to tackle international environmental problems.
Firstly
, from the perspective of transport policy, introducing restrictions on the use of private vehicles must be high on the government agenda in all countries.
For example
, the congestion charge
on
Suggestion
for
 vehicles in London has improved air quality.
Secondly
, governments must allocate resources to the development of alternative energy sources to power motor vehicles and machinery used in factory production.
Finally
, as part of the wider effort to achieve sustainable development, international cooperation to share scientific knowledge and advances in technology should be a top priority.
This
 would range across issues
such
 as the exploitation of renewable energy
,
Accept space
,
marine conservation and the reclamation of agricultural land, halting the spread of deserts in places
such
 as sub- Saharan Africa. In conclusion,
although
 raising the cost of
fuel
 would be a welcome measure, more effective steps are required to deal with a wider range of global environmental tissues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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