Some commentators feel that grandparents should live together with their children and grandchildren, while others say that older people should be encouraged to live independently. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion.

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The issue of whether grandparents should live with their extended families is partly a question of tradition in different cultures or nationalities.
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, the question of affordability
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also play
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has also played
an increasing part and so
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debate is rather complex, as we will see. On the one hand, those who support the idea of grandparents living with their children point to a higher level of emotional support which all family members may receive in
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situation,
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in times of crisis
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as bereavement.
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, it is
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true that personal security may increase, offering protection against
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problem as accidents or even robbery.
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, it seems that extended family life will
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considerably lost costly,
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with lower food and utility bills, meaning that enjoyment of life may be higher.
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, supporters of grandparents living independently often state that elderly people should be encouraged to be as self reliant as possible, as
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boost their self esteem and may guard against mental decline in old age. They
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say, with some merit, that many younger families these days do not have the housing space, or indeed the spare time, which is necessary to care properly for older members. As a
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point, it is
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true that many grandparents prefers to see their grandchildren on a less frequent basis (as opposed to every day), making these visits most special and cherished for all concerned. Overall, it appears to me that the stronger argument is in favour of grandparents living independently, with all the advantages of self reliance and separate space.
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is provided that their health and finances allow them to continue living separately, without the risk or the fear of isolation.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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