Some people believe that the best way to improve the general well-being of schoolchildren is to make physical education compulsory in all schools.

While some people do think that gym classes are necessary for children to improve their happiness, others see them as not so necessary.
This
essay will discuss the both aspects of that.
To begin
with the positive aspects of having P.E. c
lasses,
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Classes
first
of all, exercise is always needed in order to have both physical and mental health. People, including children and adults, usually should walk for longer than about one hour every day. If schools have a compulsory gym c
lasses,
Suggestion
class
children do not have to spend extra hours for exercising.
Also
, playing sports can help people to improve their team-building abilities. The fact that children need other members to play team sports can be an important reason that schools should have t
eam sports practice
Suggestion
a team sports practice
in the class. Turning to the negative aspect of having gym classes, I mentioned earlier that exercise is needed for children, but they can just move their bodies outside their classes.
In addition
, obviously there are many people who do not like or are not good at playing team sports, so
this
can be one of the factors for children not to want to go to
school
anymore. In conclusion, there are, of course, pros and cons of having a physical education c
lasses
Suggestion
class
at
school
. In my view, it is not necessary to have those classes at
school
. I believe that children should have rights to make their own decisions, and I want the society to know that there are a lot of people that are unhappy and stressed when they have to play sports.
However
, I think arts, including sports, music, and painting, are closely related to our happiness.
Therefore
, in the future, I hope children can decide what type of art c
lass he
Accept comma addition
class, he
or she will take in their
school
life.
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