The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.
The given charts illustrate the changes in the number of
Japanese
tourists travelling abroad and the percentages of Australia’s share of Japan’s tourist market in a 10 - year period, commencing from 1985.
It is clear that
the number of
Japanese
tourists travelling to other countries in the world increased gradually over
this
time period.
However
, there were some minor fluctuations in
the
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Australia’s share of
Japanese
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tourist market.
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the beginning, there were approximately 5
million
people who travelled abroad in Japan.
However
, it experienced a steady rise to reach nearly 11
million
in 1990. The following year witnessed a small drop in the number of tourists, at just above 10
million
. From
then
onwards, the figures went up significantly to finish at a high of just under 16
million
. In terms of Australia’s share of
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tourist market, it started at a low rate (exactly 2%) in 1985.
However
, the following years saw a drastic increase in percentages coming to Australia, at nearly 5% in 1988 before falling to just above 4% in 1989. In the final years, it climbed up again and reached a peak of roughly 6.1% in 1993.
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  • tourist market
  • overseas travel
  • tourism industry
  • international campaigns
  • economic prosperity
  • travel preferences
  • market share
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trend
  • attracting
  • destination
  • variability
  • contributing factors
  • currency exchange rates
  • speculate
  • tourism policies
  • competitive markets
  • popularity
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