Some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times. They don’t want their children to read entertainment books because they think it is a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Why?
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children
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books
and avoid reading Use synonyms
entertainment
It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.
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, I disagree with that statement because Linking Words
entertainment
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stress
.
First and foremost, what makes parents not ban their Use synonyms
children
read Use synonyms
entertainment
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novels
can help boost their ability to be creative and encourage the child to imagine and write their own stories with various vocabularies. Use synonyms
For example
, a survey conducted by BBS newspaper asked a group of 500 parents about the acquired skills that they observed after their Linking Words
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novels
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On the other hand
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play a vital role in reducing Use synonyms
stress
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children
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stress
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able
to solve problems and do well in their schools.
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Achievement
Try to provide counterarguments more explicitly to show a balanced discussion, even if you eventually disagree with the opposing view. This can demonstrate a more comprehensive understanding of the issue.
Task Achievement
The essay effectively presents and supports its main arguments, particularly in terms of arguing for the benefits of reading entertainment books in terms of creativity and stress relief.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction establishes a clear stance, and the conclusion provides a strong summary reinforcing the opinion laid out in the essay.
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