Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society .Others however believe that school is the place to learn this.Discuss both these views and give your opinion

It is believed by many people that it is
parents
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parents'
parent's
responsibility to provide moral values and ethics to children to become a good
members
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member
of the
society
. Whereas others have
opinion
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opined
that children can learn more from
school
rather than from parents. But
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe that both parents and teachers
plays
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play
a
significiant
important in effect or meaning
significant
role
in children’s life.
Therefore
, in my upcoming paragraphs
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will discuss both these views in detail with my relevant opinion.
Plethora
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A plethora
of people believe that moral values or ethics shown by good members of
society
are the reflection of superior backgrounds of their families.
Therfore it
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Therefore, it
Therefore it
is true that parents
plays
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play
a prominent
role
to teach their children that how to become a well-mannered
members
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member
of
society
. Children can learn or acquire things more rapidly from their parents because they tend to spend more time
in
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at
home
rather
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
in
society
. Parents should always provide
good impression
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a good impression
of their behaviour to their children.They should teach them the
imporatance
the quality of being important and worthy of note
importance
of moral values for their betterment
.
Accept space
.
Parents are accountable for the positive atmosphere in
home
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a home
the home
so that children can learn that how positive environment brings positive consequences in every tough
situtions
the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time
situation
.
Moreover
,
school
is the
second
home
where teachers
plays
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play
second massive
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a second massive role
the second massive role
role
in children’s life. They teach them how to behave as a
gentlemen
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gentleman
in
society
through
numerious
amounting to a large indefinite number
numerous
moral subjects as well as through activities. Teachers
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
adolescents
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adolescent
adolescent's
behaviour in class. And if any children behave ill mannered in class, teachers have
potential
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the potential
to change them from ill mannered to well mannered human beings. They can
delievered
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deliver
delivered
various examples of famous good individuals of
society
to children. So that they can acquire the points and importance of moral ethics in their mind. To recapitulate, both parents and teachers are accountable to teach adolescents to become good members of
society
. Children learn
first
from
home
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
from
school
.
Therefore
,
home
and
school
plays
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play
an efficient
role
in children’s life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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