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Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is certainly true that, taken as a whole, the tourist industry generates huge sums
od
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 money for the global economy.
Moreover
, the local economies of resorts around the world are often dependent on the influx of visitors every year, particularly with regards to local employment. My own country welcomes
huge number
Suggestion
a huge number
 of overseas visitors annually, and a significant number of people are employed in the hotel industry as a restaurant.
However
, it is sometimes argued that a significant share of the money generated goes not to the local economy but to the multinational companies that supply the transport to and from the destination and the hotel
chins
metal shackles; for hands or legs
chains
chain's
 and shopping outlets that offer hospitality to these visitors. Cities
also
 point to the negative effect of
tourism
 on local culture. The way of life indigenous people can often be undermined by developments that prioritize the needs of the visiting tourists.
Finally there
Accept comma addition
Finally, there
 is the
wide spread
widely circulated or diffused
widespread
 effect of
tourism
 on the environment. The arrival of huge numbers of tourists can be a drain on scarce local resources
such
 as water, food and energy. Pollution, both through
n
indefinite article, "an" is use before a vowel sound, "a" otherwise
an
and
 increase in passenger flights and the local waste generated concern.
Then
 of course there is the physical impact on the landscape and ecosystem of large-scale construction.
Nonetheless
, it is probably wrong to claim the problems are being ignored. The growth in sustainable
tourism
 is evidence that people are aware of the impact they are having and are keen to contribute to a more positive experience, for themselves as well as for local people and the environment. As the market tends to determine how things develop, we can only hope that the demand for
this
from
the phonological or orthographic sound or appearance of a word that can be used to describe or identify something
form
 of responsible
tourism
 continues to grow.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic growth
  • Cultural dilution
  • Environmental degradation
  • Responsible tourism
  • Ecotourism
  • Cultural conservation
  • Habitat destruction
  • Sustainable practices
  • Cultural exchange
  • Commercialization of cultural sites
  • Cultural heritage
  • Local ecosystems
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