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Nowadays many people work from home. Some think it is beneficial, while others think it may distract the family routine. What is your opinion?

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Recently, humanity and all of communities have been struggling and enduring with disease which restricts people who were feeling desperate, to go their struggle and socialise;
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, the people have started to job in their homes and spent almost all of their times without going out except shopping to feed their needs. Half of the people are still in adaptation period, yet remain have gotten used to arrange their whole jobs from at their
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 by their computer using remote access. In the beginning, society had found the remote systems weird while they were managing their staffs by online networks; So that, it didn’t task for a while until the people adapt the systems. After that, the online systems were assumed reasonable and meaningful;
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, remote access and working online weren't single problem.
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, their family members should have kept themselves at their
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 due to restrictions of the disease which is dubbed as a Covid-19;
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, the people should have borne distracting circumstances in cases where they were using their homes as a
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 post. Undoubtedly, the people who trial at offices and buildings which are built for trade and filled with serious employees and professions, cannot anticipate similar quiet and peaceful working areas of their homes. Their children can make noise while they are playing games or even having conversations.
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, their wives may want to tell and share
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 rumours about their neighbours while the people are working with remote access, if the people are married and all of the circumstances lead to distraction. In a different perspective, the people may perceive their homes as an se
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, the online works and using people’s
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 place may ruin their family routines which provide people to get rid of their stressful workl
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 illustration, if the people spare their leisure time for their task because of the accessible remote online systems of their jobs due to the orders of their bosses whenever they want, they may not find adequate time to spend with their family members or on the family routines. Eventually, people both got used to in
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 job conception and not, are not sure that whether the system is meaningful or not. According to me, I found it beneficial as well as it is distracting;
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, avoiding to spend most of my time on roads to reach my workplace and wear boring and uncomfortable clothes which have worn at production according to the rules of my company, can be assumed spectacular conditions.
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