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Some people are of the opinion that there should be a car-free day once every month, on which no private vehicles are allowed on the road. Discuss the advantages and possible disadvantages.

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Its Argued in society that due to traffic congestion and increased
airpollution
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air pollution
 there should be
restriction
Suggestion
a restriction
 of usage of private vehicles the following
pargaraph
one of several distinct subdivisions of a text intended to separate ideas; the beginning is usually marked by a new indented line
paragraph
 would discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the subject
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 with the upper hand to control private vehicles is that it will reduce the air
pollution
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considerabely
to a great extent or degree
considerably
 and
also
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 it would curb
un necessary
not necessary
unnecessary
 traffic congestions in the narrow lanes of the city
.
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.
Reduced air
pollution
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 would lead to improved air quality ultimately better health to the people
.
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.
Limited traffic would
also
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 drop the level of noise
pollution
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 which occurs due to honking in congestion
.
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.
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However overlooking
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However, overlooking
 the adverse effect of
restricition
a principle that limits the extent of something
restriction
restrictions
 of private vehicles would be unfair
.
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.
 It would lead to increased
crowd
Suggestion
crowding
 on public
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transport which
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transport, which
 may lead to accident while boarding and
debaording
separate into parts or portions
dividing
decoding
 due to saturation of public
transport
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which
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Which
 will result in late reporting of office staff
,
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,
students to their
respctive
considered individually
respective
 destination
.
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.
in
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In
 continuation it would be a discomfort for people in those newly
devolped
being changed over time so as to be e.g. stronger or more complete or more useful
developed
area
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areas
 where
avaibility
the quality of being at hand when needed
availability
 of public
transport
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 is an issue.
to
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To
 illustrate people in rural
area s
a particular geographical region of indefinite boundary (usually serving some special purpose or distinguished by its people or culture or geography)
areas
are
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is
 dependant on their own vehicles as public
transport
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 is not fully
devolped
being changed over time so as to be e.g. stronger or more complete or more useful
developed
 its time restricted which will have
impact
Suggestion
an impact
 on their commuting in case of emergency To conclude
Authorites
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
authorities
 as a start to reduce
pollution
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 should
initaiate
bring into being
initiate
imitate
 car free day once in
month
Suggestion
the month
a month
 specially during public holiday ensuring the
avaibilty
a positive feeling of wanting to push ahead with something
avidity
 of public
transport
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.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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