Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Provinces are flattering more and more
comparable
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comparison
comparisons
, because humans are able to buy every kind of requisites
all-over
covering the entire surface
allover
the world. There are many positive aspects and negative aspects as well.
Firstly
, In
kindoms
a domain in which something is dominant
kingdoms
condoms
people can buy
any thing
an indefinite thing
anything
that other can buy because, states are developing in
new era
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the new era
a new era
. The competition between sovereign states are getting high.
Contries
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Countries
are trying to give their best reports. It is the good aspect that the desires of humans can be
fulfill
completed to perfection
fulfilled
easily. People would not fight for their
desiras
the feeling that accompanies an unsatisfied state
desires
desire
. Pakistan and India have similar conditions almost.
That is
why, they do not fight
from
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with
each other to achieve their goals. According to my opinion, if people of every
states
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state
State
can buy what they want to get than the competition between
soverign
(of political bodies) not controlled by outside forces
sovereign
states would be
gotten
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getting
low because, they will stop to do struggle for the development
for
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of
their countries.
Further more
in addition
Furthermore
, the desires to achieve better than other states would be
died
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dying
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
the battle between countries is mandatory. Because, the
expension
the act of increasing (something) in size or volume or quantity or scope
expansion
in growth would cause to discover unique discoveries. By way of illustration, if schools stop to divide students in diverse ranks student would stop to do struggle for their
best
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good
better
grades, so competition is obligatory, The
sililarity
the quality of being similar
similarity
to get everything cannot give the good results.
to
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To
recapitulate, competitions are obligatory rather than, similarities to
ahieve
to gain with effort
achieve
everything that the humans want for
theirself
.
fouereign
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Foreign
Fouereign
states will
struggles
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struggle
more and attain higher than their demands. In my
opinion it
Accept comma addition
opinion, it
has many positive and negative impacts.
However
,
advantages
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the advantages
are a way more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
.
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  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
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