It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime is a direct influence of the increase in violence in media. To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

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Some people believe that media play a major role to influence the young minds and
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of that there is a sudden shot in teenager crime reports. In my opinion, I do not agree to
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statement completely, A shortfall of harmonious family background and strong legal actions are
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also contributing factor
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also a contributing factor
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essay will talk about the possible role of the media and other factors as well.
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with the media, now-a-days youngsters receives a lot of information from television, newspaper, internet and other social media websites. Sometimes just to increase the TRP of the channel or programme they used to put unnecessary emphasis,
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gossip (usually a mixture of truth and untruth) passed around by word of mouth
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or use some other wrong methods.
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- ATM looting and identity theft are suitable for
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scenario.
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, there is circulation of some content on social media where they are breaking the rules in the name of adventure which excites the other young minds.
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-there was a video on the internet where two boys on motorcycle harassing the policeman. As explained earlier, it might be a lot of fun to those are watching and can provoke them to try
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crime too.
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, those who are raised in an unhealthy family atmosphere or inadequacy of supervision they are more often indulge into unlawful activities.
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youths dearth of lovable environment and moral values to show love, compassion and empathy
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our penalization acts for them is just like a warning rather than the punishments. Crimes in the slums are because of manipulation of young minds and poverty of moral etiquettes.
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Rape case is the best evidence for the later one where one of the culprits was under age who got escaped from being punished by the law.
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without being exposed to media brutality, they don’t dither for lawbreaking. All in all, news coverage, police-based reality programs and social media might directly and indirectly influence the disproportionate treatment of minority youth, but no one can deny the importance of mental conditioning aspects of family while considering the accelerated criminality in the minors.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitize
  • media consumption
  • juvenile crime
  • antisocial behavior
  • socioeconomic conditions
  • psychological effects
  • parental supervision
  • content creators
  • ethical responsibility
  • prevalent
  • mitigate
  • negative influences
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