Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to change our character traits. To what extent do you agree?

Our characteristic features are
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with
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our
parents
because family genes continue from their children. I disagree
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idea as
people
can like her
parents
about face but
cant
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can't
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like characteristic properties. I will follow
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idea in
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with,
people
usually
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of
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her/his
parents
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face.
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personalities
very
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are very
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diffrent
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different
, because
personality
connect
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connects
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with environment and
education
. By
the
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that
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time we need
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to research
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this situations
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.
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environment
significant
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on
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to
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character.
Forwhy
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in surrounding there are friends, families,
role
model
people
etc… And your
personality
will
be likes
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.
İn
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personality
will be different
her
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from her
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/his family.
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given
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there is
a
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between
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teenager
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teenagers
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. They asked youth
people
‘Who is your
role
model
?’%63
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teenager
said my
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model
is one of the famous, %23
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said my
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model
my
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friend , %6
teenager
said my
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model
my
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teacher, %5
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said my mother, %3
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said
my
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father.
This
also
shows that for
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teenagers
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parents
are not
role
models. And
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teenager
dont
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don't
want
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them. And
also
will not to be. Another topic,
education
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is education
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.
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wide topic. You learn subjects in school and
in
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the other
hand
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you learn
life
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about life
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. You learn friendship, you learn to be alone. And
this
situation
affect
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your
personality
. Because your family are not next to you.
İf
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you do something you have to do
without
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it without
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family. Another issue
,
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is, teacher
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teacher
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the teacher
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. When you start school
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the
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teacher
with
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you. Just teachers are not physic with you her/ his idea every time with you. And you want or
dont
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don't
want it
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does
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not matter you will accept
this ideas
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these ideas
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. To
coclude
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conclude
,
education
and
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
environmental
changes
people
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people's
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personalities.
Thats
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That's
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why
people
usually
dont
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don't
like her
parents
about character.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predetermined
  • character traits
  • genetic influence
  • environmental factors
  • personality development
  • upbringing
  • foundation
  • evolution of traits
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