Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to change our character traits. To what extent do you agree?

Our characteristic features are
same
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the same
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with
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our
parents
because family genes continue from their children. I disagree
this
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idea as
people
can like her
parents
about face but
cant
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can't
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like characteristic properties. I will follow
this
idea in
going
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paragraph.
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with,
people
usually
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of
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her/his
parents
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face.
However
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personalities
very
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are very
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diffrent
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different
, because
personality
connect
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connects
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with environment and
education
. By
the
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that
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time we need
research
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to research
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this situations
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this situation
these situations
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.
Firstly
environment
significant
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is significant
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on
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to
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character.
Forwhy
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For why
in surrounding there are friends, families,
role
model
people
etc… And your
personality
will
be likes
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.
İn
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this
case
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personality
will be different
her
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from her
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/his family.
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given
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there is
a
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apply
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between
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on
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teenager
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teenagers
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. They asked youth
people
‘Who is your
role
model
?’%63
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teenagers
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teenager
said my
role
model
is one of the famous, %23
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teenagers
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teenager
said my
role
model
my
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friend , %6
teenager
said my
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model
my
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teacher, %5
teenager
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said my mother, %3
teenager
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said
my
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, my
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father.
This
also
shows that for
teenager
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teenagers
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parents
are not
role
models. And
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teenagers
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teenager
dont
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don't
want
likes
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them. And
also
will not to be. Another topic,
education
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is education
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.
Education
is
very
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wide topic. You learn subjects in school and
in
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on
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the other
hand
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you learn
life
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about life
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. You learn friendship, you learn to be alone. And
this
situation
affect
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your
personality
. Because your family are not next to you.
İf
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If
you do something you have to do
without
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it without
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family. Another issue
,
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is, teacher
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teacher
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the teacher
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. When you start school
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the
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teacher
with
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is with
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you. Just teachers are not physic with you her/ his idea every time with you. And you want or
dont
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don't
want it
doe
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does
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not matter you will accept
this ideas
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this idea
these ideas
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. To
coclude
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conclude
,
education
and
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
environmental
changes
people
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people's
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personalities.
Thats
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That's
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why
people
usually
dont
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don't
like her
parents
about character.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predetermined
  • character traits
  • genetic influence
  • environmental factors
  • personality development
  • upbringing
  • foundation
  • evolution of traits
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