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People in the community can buy cheaper products nowadays. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

#people #community #products
Today consumers
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Today, consumers
 could spend less
money
 on purchasing goods. While there are several disadvantages of
this
 problem, I would argue that cheaper
price
 brings greater advantages to customers and businesses. On the one hand,
the lower
Suggestion
the low
 cost of products has some drawbacks.
Firstly
, people would spend much
money
 on unnecessary goods which significantly contributes to a great waste of
money
.
For example
, due to the sale programs of clothing stores, my mother bought cheap T-shirts that had never worn them. If the
price
 of goods does not decrease, many people would not waste
money
 on unnecessary products.
Secondly
, many people consume these goods which leads to cheap mass production to provide them with enough products.
As a result
, some producers might use materials that are cheap and low-quality.
This
 reduces the trust of customers in these brands.
On the other hand
, I believe the decrease of products
is
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are
 beneficial for both citizens and enterprises to some extent. The
first
 clear benefit is that people could save their budgets, which helps them to spend their
money
 on other necessary items.
For instance
, the
price
 of petrol went down in the Covid-19
outbreak which
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outbreak, which
 allows residents to spend more expenditure on buying foods and paying electronic bills. Another great benefit is that because of the decline of consumer good
price
, many families who have low income could own products that have been
unaffordable
 before, which increases their living standard and narrows the gap between the rich and the poor.
Furthermore
, lower cost could increase the
sale
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sales
 volume of stores.
This
 allows these shops to make profits and resolve their inventories. In conclusion, while cheaper
price
 for goods can have several drawbacks, I would argue that its benefits are greater.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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