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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?

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Whether businesses should focus on seeking to make a profit or accomplishing the social obligations has raised different controversies among people. From my perspective, companies are supposed to do more for society than simply make money. On the one hand, it is not refutable that businesses must make money with the target of surviving in a competitive world. Logically, there are so many
company
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companies
 have
top priority
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the top priority
a top priority
 of promoting revenues so as to cover its running costs
such
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 as employees’ wages or payment for buildings and utilities. On top of these costs, companies
also
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 need to invest in improvements and innovations to sustain
successful position
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a successful position
 in
business world
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the business world
. If a company is unable to pay the bills or have some stumbling blocks from
modification
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a modification
 of customers’ needs, any concerns about social responsibilities are irrelevant.
In other words
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, unless a company is in good financial health, it will not make a positive contribution to society.
On the other hand
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, it seems to me that companies should not run with the sole aim of maximizing profit
,
Accept space
,
 they have a wider role to play in society. One social obligation must be mentioned that both owners and managers necessarily treat their employers
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as well rather than
 explore them.
For example
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, taking care more painstaking with their workers by providing “living wage” will not only help them have a good quality of life, but it
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also create
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also creates
has also created
enthusiastic or dedicated sense
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an enthusiastic or dedicated sense
 of them. Apart from that companies can spend a proportion of their
profit
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profits
 to support local charities of aid to education initiatives. These actions are likely to constitute a well-educated community and it will be a tremendous advantage to develop a country’s economy. In conclusion, it might
sensible
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sensibly
sensitize
 for businesses to place as much importance on their social responsibilities as they do on financial objectives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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