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Some people think that poverty is the reason behind most crimes. Do you agree or disagree?

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In today's world most of the prisons are getting fully accommodated by prisoners who have a poor background. Some people have a thought lack of income sources is the reason behind most offences. I accord with the notion and in the upcoming paragraph I will elaborate two reasons to support my viewpoint.
First
 and foremost, most of the people who are poor do not possess neither assets nor a source of income. These people cannot even afford necessities like meal and shelter.
For instance
, a survey report has shown that 56 percent of the populace in a nation cannot buy feed to feed themselves. So, to buy the foodstuff items they get engaged in crime like drug dealing and sexual rackets. In these activities a surplus amount of money can be earned so poor people get involved in these offences easily.
Secondly
, most of the people of poor community are drunkards and drug addicted.
This
 addiction become so severe that an addicted person spends all his money on buying the products to fulfil the addiction. As an evidence, a packet of marijuana cost about ten thousand dollars and cannot be afforded by the poor. The addict starts thinking that optimal state of well being is received only by taking injections of drugs. So, to buy these products, addicts starts doing crimes like kidnapping a child and In
such
 crimes they demand a high amount of money. To conclude, Most criminals do a barred activity so they can eradicate their poverty and fulfil their demands like food. A crime is
also
 performed by drug addicts to somehow buy the drugs.
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