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Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. Write a letter to the hospital. In your letter explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do give details of when you would be available for this work

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Dear Sir, My name is Vaishali Makwana. I reside on the same lane of your hospital building. I am writing
this
 letter to enquire about the advertisement published in the Times of India regarding volunteer
work
. My parents are doctors and they devote their professional lives to serve people and society as a whole. I am highly inspired by them and have worked with them in their nursing home. Since I
work
 with them on a part-time basis, I would like to best use the spare hours in doing charitable
work
. I can assist a professional nurse, take care of babies, help patients to move and bring them meals. As I have experience
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working in a nursing home, I am comfortable performing any of the aforementioned tasks. Since
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 I
work
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 on weekdays at my
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 clinic. I will be available from Monday to Saturday between 4 pm to 6 pm. So, please feel free to contact me anytime and do let me know when I can start working. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Vaishali Makwana
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