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the best way to improve health is to exercise daily. To what extent do you agree.

#health #exercise
No one can deny the importance of doing an exercise.
Moreover
, health is an important thing for everyone. So
,
Accept space
,
many people seek to keep fit. By different ways
such
 as playing football or playing basketball. But the best way to improve health is to exercise every day. Because of several reasons. I will demonstrate all these motives.
First
 of all, the
first
 reason is that if anyone does exercises, he will keep and maintain his body fit.
Furthermore
, there are a lot of methods to play
such
 as going to Gem or going to the swimming pool. Nowadays
,
Accept space
,
many people, especially young people prefer going to Gem to practise. Owing to it, contains a variety of sources to be fit and you can build muscles as well.
Although
 the price of Gyms is very high.
Additionally
, they usually go to a popular club.
For example
, Alahly team on the local scale. But, in the international scale, they go to a popular club. For instance, Real Madrid and Barcelona. They prefer to be members in these clubs. By
this
 way, they will find a lot of resources to have fun and a diversity of sports
such
 as Squash, tennis and handball.
Besides
, there are several services
such
 as cinemas and so on. If anyone is suffering from obesity, he should go to sports clubs or Gyms. As well as, he should follow a special diet. Let us shed light on the importance of doing a sport. As
this
 way makes people fit.
As a result
, they will feel happy and enthusiastic. Noticeably, sportsmen have a special fun and power. Doing an exercise strengthens the immune system and build muscles. To sum up, as far as I am concerned, I agree with people who play daily.
Additionally
, I think that the government should support people to play any sport.. Sportsmen hopefully practise and do exercises.
Submitted by Joe elsantawy  on

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