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Today more people are waiting until their thirty to get married and have children. Is it a positive or negative development?

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These days, many young people are getting married or having children when they reach to thirties. In my opinion,
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 is a positive development because they are financially stable and mature enough to take responsibility. On the one hand, being financially stable and a good career is one of the main reasons why I think that marrying or having a
child
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 by the
age
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 of
thirty
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 is a positive trend. To elucidate, these days the cost of living has increased a lot than earlier due to the rise in the cost of inflation. If a person has a promising career and well-settled job that provides him or her a good standard of living and prosperous future,
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 they can plan to get married or having the
child
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 in order to give happiness to a new
relationship
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.
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, a report by the BBC News revealed that in India, the inflation has risen to 10%, and many youngsters struggle a lot to get a good job,
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, it is achieved when they reach to the
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 of
thirty
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 and
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, they financially stable to get married or well-settled in the life to give proper education to their
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.
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, the maturity to handle responsibility is another reason why I think
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 is a positive trend. If the person is not mature enough to understand the new
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 he or she is bound with, they will ruin the career of them and the others and even worse, they could end up with that relation.
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, when the person reaches the
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 of
thirty
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 or more, they become enough mature to handle the new relation properly and leave it lifelong with it.
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, the report of the High Court of India discovered that 65% of divorce cases are a newly married couple who are under the
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 of 28 years on the ground of immature reasons, like fighting all the time as food is not good or coming late at home from work. In conclusion, I believe that having the
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 or marrying by the
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 of
thirty
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 is a positive influence as not only do they are financially well-settled to support the new
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, but
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 having maturity can save the
relationship
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.

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