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some people think money is the best gift to give youngsters, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people argue that,
money
 is the best
gift
 that can be given to the youngsters
,
Accept space
,
while others argue that it is not acceptable to do so. I firmly believe that,
money
 is not the best
gift
 to give to the youngsters.
Therefore
,
this
 essay will explain my viewpoints in detail and reach to a conclusion.
Firstly
, it can be said that, the giving
money
 is one of the best gifts for the youngsters. In some instances, it can be useful when supporting them with opening up a new bank account, or giving them for a useful work
such
 as Education or Medicine. Some of the people are
also
tendingalso
tendingalso
tendingalso
 tend to
giving
Suggestion
give
be giving
 them a pocket
money
 that so helping them with the financial support.
However
, it is not the best
gift
, since people
also
 can surprise them with other ways,
such
 as Hanging with them for a diner, Watching a movie with them, Presenting a nice
gift
 and Much More.
For example
, In the recent study done by the California University revealed that 50% of the USA Kids are so interesting into the gifts. So, the parents and families can give their favourite gifts on
such
 kids and youngsters with special moments. I personally believe that, the gifts are better things to give to the kids rather than giving with the
money
. So,
Money
 can be used in various ways, yet some kids might use that an inappropriate way.
Lastly
, It can be concluded that, the
money
 is not the best
gift
 to give to the youngsters, yet giving the gifts can be effective and useful for the youngsters.
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