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Discussion essay It is thought by some that it is better to live in the city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#discussion #city #life #countryside
In
this
 era, it is becoming
increasingly popular topic
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an increasingly popular topic
 to decide that, which is
good
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a good place
place
 for living-
city
 or
countryside
. Some folks consider that a
city
 is far better than a village in the terms of
live
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living
 life. While others do not
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
this
.
This
 essay will discuss both the sides along with my opinion.
To begin
 with, the people who are in the favour of
live
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life
living
 in the
city
, have valid reasons for that.
Firstly
, they think that the opportunities are numerous in the town, because a
city
 always has numbers of shops and companies.
For example
, a person has an access to the different types of jobs and he/she can choose the job freely.
Secondly
, the town has numbers of good schools and colleges where the students can get the higher education easily and they do not need to move from one
place
 to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
.
On the other hand
, the chunk of persons
think
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thinks
 that the village is a perfect
place
 to live. Like, there is an always peaceful environment in the
countryside
 and the pollution level is very low. So
,
Accept space
,
one can take breath in the fresh air.
Also
, the values are very rich there in the terms of respect. For
exmaple
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
,
mostly
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most
 villagers follow the rule of simple living and high thinking, so
that is
 why they always respect each others. To conclude,
this
 essay discussed the benefits to live in the
city
 and the
countryside
. In my opinion, I think the
countryside
 is far
beter
(comparative of 'good') superior to another (of the same class or set or kind) in excellence or quality or desirability or suitability; more highly skilled than another
better
place
 for
loving
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more loving
 than a
city
.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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