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What are the advantages or disadvantages of living in a metro.

#metro
Some people think that abiding in the big cities is beneficial for their development. Others,
however
, think that living in the rural area is more flexible
on
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in
 their financial planning. It is considered beneficial because citizens can visit many educational areas which are located
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in
 each specific community. Each educational area provides multi-learning materials to people who is interested in the topic.
Thus
, the amount of daily consumptions will be considerable.
For instance
, mothers could take the
shortest
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Shortest
 path to purchase several ingredients for cooking and pick their children up from schools on their way
back
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Back
 home after working off.
However
, another pattern of the city, like the central business district, it could divide many kinds of building into specific areas they belong to.
Therefore
, each location has more probabilities to expand itself effectively.
Also
, the traffic situation in the rush hour could be managed efficiently. As discussed above, the negative points associated with the limited development of
city
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the city
cities
 and traffic congestions
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 each peak hour outweigh the merits. Comparing with the two kinds of module of urban planning, it seems that it is
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in
 the best way to arrange facilities with different attributes separately. It is
also
 worth
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of
 mentioning that the number of traffic problems could be declined and each specific zone of the city would be expandable, not merely booming its
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Economy
.
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