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Some people say a person’s success in adult life is the result of the way they were brought up as a child by their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that a person's
success
 in adult growth is a result of upbringing they received.
Ho
wever i d
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However, I
However I
o not quite agree with
this
 view, in my view person achievement is much more the result of hard task and perseverance. Upbringing is ultimate, just because it is used to grow up a child well, but it is not sure they will be successful in future. Parents are a teacher and guides of a child, but some children grow up without their parents or against the principles they set for themselves. They spend their
life
 without the involvement of parents and
success
 in their
life
. Quite a few people learn how to spend
life
 without parents. There are a lot of examples of wall street wealthy businessman, they were orphans and earned
success
 from scratch. Hard work, skills and Perseverance lead you toward
success
. Most of the people got
success
 in their
life
 just because of their skills and work devotion. They learn from experience or situations. They have the ability to learn from their own mistakes.
Life
 choices
also
 play a crucial role in shaping the
success
 of individuals,
for instance
 friends and company we kept playing an important role in
su
ccess o
Suggestion
the success
f one's
life
. To conclude, no matter a child is born with silver spoon in their mouth or having a wealthy parents, It is the result of hard work and skills to make them successful in their
life
,
however
 there is a lot of examples of
success
 stories who got
success
 without their parents. Ultimately upbringing is important, but
this
 is not only factor to make a successful
life
 of a person.
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