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In order for a child to develop his/her family life, mothers and fathers should take a course on parenting skills and child development each year. Do you agree or disagree ?

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In
this
 modern era, raising up
a
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an
 offspring, according to the objectives of a family is still a question of a dilemma. I thoroughly believe that the growth of a
child
 solely depends upon the issues faced in the society, and the values learnt by the family.
Moreover
, for the
child
 to transform
to
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into
 adult requires learning
by
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from
 their own experiences.
To begin
 with, parents should be themselves as a role model for their infant to look up to them and learn their habits, whereas still in some families, elderly people force their offspring to follow their set of rules which makes the
child
 dumb by only listening to their opinions.
This
 impact on
child
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a child
children
 will make them behave the same even in their adulthood in the society.
For instance
, if a grown person in
such
 a background it may affect his/her professional and personal status on some point in their life.
secondly
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Secondly
, in
this
 modernized lifestyle where development is in constant evolution parenting skills can't be concentrated on individual terms. The best way to combat with
this
 occurring lifestyle change is to expose the offspring to the society with
further
 limitations set up by the elderly persons in the family.
Furthermore
, building a good conversation with their adolescent will enable them to open up with their thoughts and ideology about their daily routine in a more friendly base. To summarize, for a toddler to develop into a man/woman should go through various stages of development.
this
Suggestion
This
 development is not fully in the hands of parents. Various factors come to point regarding the growth of an individual in an environment. Even though many factors play a role, it totally depends on the mindset of the individual to perceive things the way it is.
This
 can be improved by the guidance of their parents,
however
, exposure and experiences gained by a person will only lead them to a family life.
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