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women works as well as men nowadays, so some people say that men and women have to do household works equally. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, the majority of women tend to work as well as men in comparison with the past. According to
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 phenomenon, some people assert that men should do
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 works equally, while others profess
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 works are just women's jobs. I assume that to alleviate
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 phenomenon we should have the right awareness of
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 tasks and
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 would be a paramount way.
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 with, it is
efficatious
marked by qualities giving the power to produce an intended effect
efficacious
infectious
 that
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 tasks are no longer women's jobs since women tend to work and they have no sufficient
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 to do
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 works by themselves without men's support. Recent research has shown the fact that tons of women suffer from house works. Because
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 tasks are
grueling
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gruelling
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work
 and
repititive
repetitive and persistent
repetitive
.
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, in Korea, tons of fathers take paternal leave to spend their
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 with children.
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 shows that spending
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 with children could help children's improvement. Fathers play an important role to rear their children.
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, parents should make a joint effort to mitigate
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 problem.
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, I believe that split
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 tasks equally are difficult.
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, parents should put their heads together to mitigate
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 phenomenon. In America, men treat house appliances, while women cleaning the room. They do house works according to the
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 table.
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 means that doing
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 works together would be helpful to both of them. In conclusion, It is clear that
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 works are tricky to separate
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.
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, I strongly believe that modern people could do
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 works equally, meeting women and men's needs simultaneously.

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