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Some people say that international tourism is harmful to our society nowadays. Do you agree?

According to a bull market of international
tourism
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, the majority of states regard international
tourism
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 as a detrimental industry. I assume that
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 is because of vandalism and overuse of resources.
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 of all, several abroad visitors tend to indulge regardless of appropriate attitudes. They exploit facilities and infrastructures without any respect.
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, a lot of countries are reluctant to be a host of
tourism
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.
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 of all, in order to travel all around the world, diverse types of resources
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 as fuels, electricity, and petroleum are essential. Indeed, a
nnually many
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annually, many
global research corporations have posted a huge amount of pollutant figures pertaining to international
tourism
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, simultaneously showing an upward tendency. To alleviate these harmful effects, states and visitors should make a joint effort mindfully.
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, visitors should have an awareness of guidelines about how to protect r
elics,
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the relics
 historical sites, and nature cautiously, while the government should offer the meticulous details in many languages to help foreigners' understanding of r
ules.
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the rules
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, relatively small size tour groups would be better rather than the manifold population of groups, not distracting native residents. These sorts of fundamental and obvious thoughts and attitudes would lead to positive consequences significantly in the years to come.
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, the onus mindset might bring our society of merits, decreasing drawbacks. To sum up, it is clear that scores of states affected by international tourists in lousy ways.
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, upgrading tourists' awareness and manners would result in prosperity in the
tourism
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 business economically and globally.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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