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In developing countries, children in rural communities have less access to education. Some people believe that the problem can be solved by providing more schools and teachers, while others think that the problem can be solved by providing computers and Internet access. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Education is a common aspect which should be considered extremely
important for children all
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important for all children
 throughout the world despite the differences of society. But in the current scenario, poverty plays
a
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an
 important role in
education
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the education
 of underprivileged toddlers. To combat
such
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 issues, various laws should be considered by the government to provide equal education to every individual despite their differences. Let me highlight several aspects which
helps
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help
countryside children
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countryside, children
 with their studies.
To begin
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 with, some people have a belief that schooling is the most important stage in the life of adolescent in which they can obtain utmost guidance from the teachers and will
also
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 transform them
to
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into
independent individual
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an independent individual
independent individuals
 to the society by the experiences gained by daily routine in school.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, teachers play a major part in the improvement of a student
in particular
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 subjects.
For example
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, a student who shows poorer results in
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
subject
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subject, such
such
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 as maths or science can be improved by proper guidance and care of a teacher.
In addition
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, schooling nurtures an individual with moral values and social norms so that he/she will be able to survive independently. In another case, some people believe that with an
internet
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 access a student can learn with ease and prepare by themselves rather than
face
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 to
face
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 interaction. In
this
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 scenario, individual solely depends on
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
 and the
internet
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 facility.
Although
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internet
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the internet
 provides all information at the click of a mouse, it does not provide complete knowledge about subjects rather it provides known
theortical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
theoretical
 knowledge than practical
skils
an ability that has been acquired by training
skills
. To conclude, children from rural areas should build themselves with both
theortical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
theoretical
theoretically
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 as well as practical studies.
Therefore
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, confidence can
also
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 be gained by the exposure and experience in
this
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 competitive society which can be provided only by
face
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 to
face
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 education. Computer and
internet
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 facility can
also
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 be provided to know about things and to gain computer skills. Even though, the technology plays
a
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an
 indispensable role in today's world,
eduaction
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
 and learning system should be followed as before despite cultural differences.
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