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The number of people suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people believe that alternative medicine can help. Do you agree that alternative medicines are effective

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In the current era, people are having lots of health issues which are due to their adaptive lifestyle. Problems which have developed due to inaccurate lifestyle, cannot be recovered by modern therapy. In fact, it is required to go for naturopathy
such
 as yoga, acupuncture or massage therapy for the treatment of
such
 problems. I am with the opinion that natural remedy is the only way to get rid of issues which human have developed due to their poor lifestyle. I will discuss the reasons in the following text. The foremost reason to agree with
this
 statement is the effectiveness of alternative medicine without any harm.
Such
 therapies can be done naturally, which does not harm the human body, whereas English medicines always have a side effect along with the treatment.
In addition
 to
this
, opting for the yoga and messages always give relief to the patients for a lifetime, which cannot be expected in modern therapies as that treatment is always temporary and come back anytime in the life. Another reason is related to the options and cost of alternate medicine. Alternative medicine in the today’s era has various choices to pick from
such
 as, homoeopathy, naturopathy, yoga and different massages which can be used based on the type and severity of the health issue. These treatments re not only effective, but
also
 cheaper than the allopathy.
For example
, I recently read a report in the Guardian, which published the report that more than 70% of the people choose naturopathy compared to western medicines.
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