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You are going abroad on holiday and your friend will stay in your home while you are away. Write a letter to your friend, in your letter: - Explain where you hide the key - Describe what your friend need to do in your absen - Say when you are coming back

#holiday #friend #home #absen
Dear Nathan, Hope you're well! I appreciate
for
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your willingness to stay at my
house
 for several days
while
 I am away. I am sorry I will not be able to wait for you on Monday because some
last
-minute schedule changes at work made me move my ticket to Sunday. For your information, you can take the gate key to my neighbour opposite my
house
, you just tell him that you are my friend who will stay in my
house
 for several days. For the main door, you can find the key under the sofa in my terrace
house
, and for all
keys
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 to rooms, I put it on the TV below the hat. For notes, you must switch on the
water
 tap every night because it's come just on the night, so you can use the
water
 in the morning.
Besides
, I hope you are able to
water
 my bonsai in the evening every day
,
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 because it will die if you never give
the
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water
 to it. If there are no additional tasks from my office, I will definitely go back on Saturday, and for my Thanksgiving, I got you
really
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 nice sweater from "Adidas" and you can receive it as my gift because of your help. Once again, I really appreciate your willingness, and I wish I could reply to it next time. Thanks for your attention in advance, and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Your best sincerely Tom Haye
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task achievement
Ensure all instructions are clear and easily understood, particularly regarding the location of the keys.
coherence cohesion
Consider proofreading the letter for minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing to improve clarity and coherence.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend.
greeting and closing
The letter includes a warm greeting and a courteous closing, enhancing the overall readability and friendliness.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph addresses a distinct aspect of the instructions and updates, maintaining clear organization.
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