You are going abroad on holiday and your friend will stay in your home while you are away. Write a letter to your friend, in your letter: - Explain where you hide the key - Describe what your friend need to do in your absen - Say when you are coming back

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Dear Nathan, Hope you're well! I appreciate

for

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your willingness to stay at my

house

for several days

while

I am away. I am sorry I will not be able to wait for you on Monday because some

last

-minute schedule changes at work made me move my ticket to Sunday. For your information, you can take the gate key to my neighbour opposite my

house

, you just tell him that you are my friend who will stay in my

house

for several days. For the main door, you can find the key under the sofa in my terrace

house

, and for all

keys

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to rooms, I put it on the TV below the hat. For notes, you must switch on the

water

tap every night because it's come just on the night, so you can use the

water

in the morning.

Besides

, I hope you are able to

water

my bonsai in the evening every day

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because it will die if you never give

the

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water

to it. If there are no additional tasks from my office, I will definitely go back on Saturday, and for my Thanksgiving, I got you

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nice sweater from "Adidas" and you can receive it as my gift because of your help. Once again, I really appreciate your willingness, and I wish I could reply to it next time. Thanks for your attention in advance, and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Your best sincerely Tom Haye

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task achievement

Ensure all instructions are clear and easily understood, particularly regarding the location of the keys.

coherence cohesion

Consider proofreading the letter for minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing to improve clarity and coherence.

suitable writing tone

The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend.

greeting and closing

The letter includes a warm greeting and a courteous closing, enhancing the overall readability and friendliness.

single idea per paragraph

Each paragraph addresses a distinct aspect of the instructions and updates, maintaining clear organization.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

246 words

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