Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays
,
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,
when the internet
has became popular more
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has become more popular
has become popular more
and more people are choosing to socialize online rather than
face
to
face
and many people say
that is
the positive development but in my opinion is the negative development
beacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
some reasons
That is
easy to see the drawback of
socialize
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socializing
socialized
online but
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online, but
I think
have
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having
four main negative. The
first
one
,
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,
if you communicate with someone
in
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on
the internet, it is very hard to see the
face
of them. You
can sure is
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can sure be
this
their
face
, the answer is no. You
can not
can not
cannot
see their
face
if they want, they just find the picture of someone and put it in the avatar. It is very hard to ensure
this
is their
face
unless you call video with them. The
second
of negative,
that is
very hard to show the emotes in the socialize online. I think the emoticon and GIF can not illustrate your emotes. And it is easy to use body language in
socialize
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socializing
face
to
face
. The
next
is, you can lose your information or your secret because someone can hack the chat and see the data. Recently, many
account
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accounts
have lose
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have lost
information or hack and they
can not
can not
cannot
recover. And the fourth negative is they can backbite and make the argument because they are hero
keybroad
device consisting of a set of keys on a piano or organ or typewriter or typesetting machine or computer or the like
keyboard
. But they don’t think about the consequence, many
case
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cases
have consequence unpredictable. The
last
but not least, the socialize online can make you can not focus on work. Your concentration was in the chat and
what
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what's
happening in the online
in
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In
other hand socialize online still have the positive.
the
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The
first
one,
that is
easy to make the friend.
you
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You
can make friend with people in
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
place just need 3g or wifi. The
second
, you can chat with somebody in anywhere, anytime.
it
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It
is so available. To sum
up
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up, this
this
is negative
development but
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development, but
developed but
developed developed but
developing but
depend on how you use
this
.
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  • reliable
  • credible
  • focused
  • immersive
  • tangibility
  • tradition
  • access
  • digital devices
  • demographics
  • older generation
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