Violence among young people has increased dramatically over the past 50 years. This rise moves in tandem with the growth in violent media. Thus, the conclusion can be drawn that violent media is the main cause of violence among young people. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the past five decades, there has been an upsurge in violent crime rates among young adults, so many people believe that due to the presence of violent media. To me, I partially agree with
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agreement is that the widespread use of the Internet worldwide and the huge source of image media have already become the technology revolution, which lets young people get to access it easily without permission of parents.
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, teenagers that watch TV set and they learn the inappropriate languages, culture and social nature, which it may be exposed to harmful source of image media
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as sexual or physical violence.
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, it contributes drastically to deviant behaviour. At the same time, some people claim that the main cause of violent crime rates among young people is related to rifts in personal relationships. In fact, I would argue that it goes against the values of a free and fair relationship.
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, a teenager has an argument with his friend about who will be captain of the team and no one puts up with each other, they might fight.
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of doing that they can tell each other about how they feel right now and keep their cool.
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perspective is increasingly unfeasible today because violent media is broadcasted to all TV sets, which is under the cover of some action movies or adventure movies
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as John Wick, Game of Thrones. Many studies prove that watch violent scenes will express aggressive demeanour and develop violent trends later in life. And these violent scenes can easily be paid attention by young people who definitely love satisfying it without an awareness of the consequences of actions. Violent behaviour is contributing to causing a significant increase in armed crimes, sexual crimes and other forms of criminal activity in the future. In summary, there is no doubt that violent media causes corresponding behaviour among young people, the widespread of violent media should be eliminated.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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