Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise in childhood obesity, while others think it is the fault of the parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

In recent decades, the quantity of children with
obesity
has drastically increased. While some people claim that the authority is liable for the infants'
obesity
, others believe that
adolescents'
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adolescent
overweight is
parent's responsibility
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the parent's responsibility
a parent's responsibility
. In my opinion, the latter approach appears more liable for adolescents. On the one hand, it is clear that the ministry should take a responsibility of
children
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child
obesity
.
Firstly
, these days more and more children rely on fast-food or pre-prepared meals, which contain too much fat, salt and sugar. To be more specific, these Foods are attractive to infants because they are cheap to buy and very easy to prepare.
As a result
, an unhealthy food can cause various problems
such
as type 2 diabetes, heart disease, cancer and overweight etc.
For instance
, a paper published by Dr Robert Watson, a world renowned specialist, reveals that the reason for infants'
obesity
is that more than 58% of children are eating fast-food in schools.
On the other hand
, parents should care about the weight of their infants.
First
and foremost, the philosophy about everything begins from home, it
make
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makes
sense that environment of
home
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the home
homes
reflect
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reflects
to
children
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children's
habit.
For example
,
mostly
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most
the overweight children have uncontrolled eating habit by their parents, so children prefer consuming unhealthy food without knowing the dire effects to their body.
Secondly
, parents are really busy with working, so they cannot manage well about their
children
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child's
children's
meal as they just provide
soke
quantifier; used with either mass nouns or plural count nouns to indicate an unspecified number or quantity
some
money to their children for having a lunch.
Moreover
, children choose to lead a sedentary lifestyle.
In particular
, in their leisure time, they watch television or go online as well as play video game
instead
of doing outdoor activities. To sum up, both the ministry and parents can play an indispensable role in preventing
children
Suggestion
child
obesity
. The authority should regulate the food industry and parents should serve
healthy home cooked meal
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healthy home cooked meals
a healthy home cooked meal
and encourage to play outdoor sports.
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