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some people believes hospital could improve in 3 years with money. discuss to extent advantages and disadvatages

#people #years #money #disadvatages
The
two
 maps represent a
city
 hospital accessible
road
 in 2007 and in 2010. That's
two
 maps gives information
city
 hospital has been features changed between 2007 to 2010. In 2007,
city
 hospital were not any regular bus station, while bus station was relating
two
 roundabouts in 2010.
Besides
, Car park has been shared 2 parts; staff and public, but both of them in the same area in 2007 when compared to 2010.
Also
 public car park in near to
city
 hospital and staff car park between
to
being one more than one
two
city
 hospitals to
city
road
 in 2010. Maps 2, about 2010, showed
city
 hospital was systematic and improving compared to 2007s map. Ring
road
 and hospital
road
 did not change both of the maps. Overall, the
two
 maps illustrated to
City
 hospital areas were developed and
also
 it has regularly ways in 2007 and in 2010.
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