With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?

In current
society
, the life expectancy in western countries has increased significantly.
Also
, fewer babies are being born, causing the relative percentage of elderly people to increase. These people have to be taken
care
of, causing the question to
rise
come into existence; take on form or shape
arise
whether
this
number of elderly people can be cared for. When people grow older, they can
also
develop more
health
issues, resulting in more visits to doctors and hospitals, and an increased usage of pharmaceuticals. Due to the current large numbers of elderly people, the pressure put onto
health
care
systems is increasing. In many western countries, the state provides most of the
health
care
system.
Therefore with
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Therefore, with
increasing numbers of old people, higher percentages of state funding have to be allocated to
health
care
and
this
could cause shortfalls in other areas,
for example
education.
This
change in the distribution of money can
therefore
impact
society
negatively.
Society
should be able to handle these changes. Governments will have been able to predict the changing demographic situations in their countries and plan
accordingly
.
This
might indeed lead to other sectors in
society
having money taken away from them, but caring for the elderly is one of the key responsibilities of today’s governments. For the future, it might be necessary to ensure that an extra insurance charge is levied on people’s salaries in order that any future financial shortfall is met.
This
would be unpopular, but would allow governments to have the necessary funds available. In conclusion,
society
today and in the future should be well able to deal with caring for their elderly. It is only a question of careful long-term forecasting and planning.
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