Despite a variety of sport facilities and gyms, people are less fit nowadays than ever before. What do you think are the main causes of this problem? What solutions can you suggest?

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Nowadays, our modern life is much more
convinient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
compared to the past with
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the numerous fitness centre
numerous fitness centre
. Though, people are lethargic and more prone to diseases than ever.
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something immaterial that stands in the way and must be circumvented or surmounted
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. The increase of people who are unfit mainly boils down to two reasons.
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, an imbalanced diet is the greatest contributor to
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, people tend to gravitate towards consuming heavily processed food that
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the human body
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, Thanks to the advent of technology, people do not indulge themselves in physical activities that can improve
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both their mental and
physical health. They spend too much time for office work and doing indoor activities which cause the lack of physical activities. To
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Netflix
and play video games in free time Solving
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problem entails altering the public’s mindset which can be done via awareness-raising campaigns. Only when there are more programmes about human health that help people plan a healthy diet to get the required nutrition for the body and at the same time unhealthy junk food has to be avoided.
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, each
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to be encouraged to do more
excercises
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercises
exercise
which would not only improve the cognitive abilities by boosting the mood but
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would help to burn extra fat. In conclusion, people are less active than ever,
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, changing the habit of people about health all over the world about the crisis is critical.
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