In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. This has negative effects on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Now we are living in
chaotic world
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a chaotic world
the chaotic world
. Endless of fashion shows and popular trends, a huge world-wide selection of video game and visual blockbusters, the exotic journey to the frequented places for the convenient and affordable global flights, all these enjoyments prove our societies has changed frequently and ubiquitously. The fast
food
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industry was born in
this
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change, I
disagree it
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disagree, it
has the negative effects on both our society and our family-relationship. The flurry of fast
food
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chain stores has dominated the main markets when crossed over our earth borders and ethical culture differences to replace the traditional
food
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. After busying all day in
office
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the office
an office
or meeting clients, enter one fast
food
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restaurant which you can find in anywhere in your city,
then
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no need to book and no need to wait a long queue, and you will get your
food
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in a few minutes or has prepaid well by the electric
food
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menu, our human can get the instinctual gratification from a paper box of the spaghetti bolognaise. The prepared
food
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meet
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meets
the customer’s demand and copes our stomach so well, and many new brands storm
to
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of
this
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flourish matured
markets
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market
. Our society and family relationships are
also
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reforming so
quickly mainly
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quickly, mainly
affected by the high-tech when the creations and productions are not independent
by
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of
men’s strength only. The gender gap is gradually
become
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becoming
venial and the
diversity
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diverse
cultures are encouraged by many governments and companies. Most of the women prefer to work
instead
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to be housewives just like their
mom
informal term for a mother
mum
or granny, so we don’t have too much
chances
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chance
to enjoy the delicious and time-consuming traditional home cooked
food
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.
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, the high fat, salty,
energy fast
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energy, fast
food
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always was taken as the rubbish
food
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when leads to the unhealthy
deits
a prescribed selection of foods
diets
and obesity issues, and is competing with the online takeaway for the traditional
food
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shops. The fast
food
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companies
has employed
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have employed
a large of RQ team focusing on how to cook
the healthy
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healthier
fast
food
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.
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