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With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast foor for their main meals. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays, in the contemporary society a majority of people have consumed fast
food
 more often compared to homemade dishes. Despite the fact that people can have the suitable alternative of ordinary foodstuff, in my opinion, disadvantages of eating fast
food
 outweigh its advantages. There are several negatives in consuming fast
food
.
First
 of all, when a person has eaten
this
 type of
food
 in big amounts, it may lead to problems with digesting. The most common disease
that is
 caused by overeating is obesity. These days, more and more children are becoming obese because they are deprived of nutritious
food
.
Moreover
, a child is encouraged by some schools to consume preprocessed
food
, maybe it happens not
intentionally
Suggestion
intended
intentional
intending
intend
,
however
, in most canteens children are provided with
food
 that adversely influence their organisms. Another drawback is that people are becoming less passionate about cooking at home. Unfortunately, most people are aware of the terrible consequences of consuming preprocessed
food
,
however
, it has not bothered them to buy
this
food
.
On the other hand
, there are
also
 two positives of eating fast
food
.
Firstly
, when a person due to his busyness cannot cook, he can easily order and receive
food
 without making special efforts.
This
 is a huge advantage for all businessmen who has a shortage of
time
 to prepare their own
food
.
Therefore
, he can eat quickly without waste of particular
time
.
Second
 plus of buying
such
food
 is that it is quite cheap and at the same
time
 affordable practically for everyone. It implies that people who cannot spend a significant amount of money on
food
, can buy it and do not feel hunger anymore. In conclusion,
although
 fast
food
 is affordable for myriad people and does not need much
time
 to cook, excessive consumption of
this
 type of
food
 may lead to obesity, which deteriorates our health, and to reluctance in preparing quality
food
.
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