IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast foor for their main meals. To what extent do you agree or disagree

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Nowadays, in the contemporary society a majority of people have consumed fast
food
Use synonyms
 more often compared to homemade dishes. Despite the fact that people can have the suitable alternative of ordinary foodstuff, in my opinion, disadvantages of eating fast
food
Use synonyms
 outweigh its advantages. There are several negatives in consuming fast
food
Use synonyms
.
First
Linking Words
 of all, when a person has eaten
this
Linking Words
 type of
food
Use synonyms
 in big amounts, it may lead to problems with digesting. The most common disease
that is
Linking Words
 caused by overeating is obesity. These days, more and more children are becoming obese because they are deprived of nutritious
food
Use synonyms
.
Moreover
Linking Words
, a child is encouraged by some schools to consume preprocessed
food
Use synonyms
, maybe it happens not
intentionally
Suggestion
intended
intentional
intending
intend
,
however
Linking Words
, in most canteens children are provided with
food
Use synonyms
 that adversely influence their organisms. Another drawback is that people are becoming less passionate about cooking at home. Unfortunately, most people are aware of the terrible consequences of consuming preprocessed
food
Use synonyms
,
however
Linking Words
, it has not bothered them to buy
this
Linking Words
food
Use synonyms
.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, there are
also
Linking Words
 two positives of eating fast
food
Use synonyms
.
Firstly
Linking Words
, when a person due to his busyness cannot cook, he can easily order and receive
food
Use synonyms
 without making special efforts.
This
Linking Words
 is a huge advantage for all businessmen who has a shortage of
time
Use synonyms
 to prepare their own
food
Use synonyms
.
Therefore
Linking Words
, he can eat quickly without waste of particular
time
Use synonyms
.
Second
Linking Words
 plus of buying
such
Linking Words
food
Use synonyms
 is that it is quite cheap and at the same
time
Use synonyms
 affordable practically for everyone. It implies that people who cannot spend a significant amount of money on
food
Use synonyms
, can buy it and do not feel hunger anymore. In conclusion,
although
Linking Words
 fast
food
Use synonyms
 is affordable for myriad people and does not need much
time
Use synonyms
 to cook, excessive consumption of
this
Linking Words
 type of
food
Use synonyms
 may lead to obesity, which deteriorates our health, and to reluctance in preparing quality
food
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: