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The most important consideration when choosing any career orjob is having a high income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely accepted that, for most people, their daily working lives will not be spent in their dream jobs. Despite
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, I do not feel that people should
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 prioritise becoming a high earner above all other concerns.
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 with, I strongly believe that people need stimulation in their daily working lives in order to feel a sense of reward. Very few of us can go through an entire career staying in a position or an industry that we find boring purely for the financial incentive.
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Secondly, there
 are so many people who see their working life as a search for fulfilment and contentment in helping others, rather than a search for wealth. It seems unlikely that the priority for, say, every nurse or teacher in the world is to become well-off, and jobs
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 as these are rarely extremely well-paid. Despite
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, some would argue that those people who have families to support should always prioritise earning a high income; after all, it means securing their children's future. Others point out that, as the job market becomes increasingly unstable across the globe, it is vital to earn more and
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 save more.
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, I do not agree that a good salary should necessarily be the number one concern for everyone. Too many people become preoccupied with the
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 pay rise or career move, and eventually become unhappy or even depressed, neither of which help them to save or to provide for their family. In summary, earning as much money as is humanly possible should not be anyone's main concern. Granted, it arguably brings financial stability, for individuals and for their families, but it is simply not worth tolerating a lifetime of unhappiness at work purely for the money.
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