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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The schools
educates
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educate
 and shapes us in able for us to be ready for the real world. Most of the people think that teaching the students to be a good parent would be a great idea.
This
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 essay will argue why it is necessary for the students to learn about good parenting. Most of our childhood was spent in our school. Young students are still playful and does not care about their future.
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, makes it hard for the teacher to explain
wide and complicated topic
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a wide and complicated topic
the wide and complicated topic
such
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 as parenting. In fact, most of the parents want their child to enjoy their youth and do not stress themselves about
adulting
putting something (as a literary work or a legislative bill) into acceptable form
editing
auditing
dating
 situations.
Children especially
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Children, especially
 those who
is
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are
 in their late childhood are experimental and curious about their environment. They tend to copy the things that they
see especially,
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see, especially
 when it is done by a person who is superior to them like their parents. In fact,
base
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based
 on research, most of the young people copy most of the things an adult do even if its wrong.
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 why teaching them what good parenting could help them distinguish what are the things that they can and cannot copy from older people. The school is vital when it comes to character formation of every human being. The essay argued that teaching good parenting as early as childhood days is helpful. To sum
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 up,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that teaching the young people about parenting builds their character and sense of responsibility which is essential in our daily lives.
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