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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Tourism has been a flourishing industry over the few decades. Some people are of the opinion that tourists from foreign countries should be charged more than local people when they visit culturally and historically recognized places of interest. I completely disagree with
this
 view. Tourism provides regional and national economic benefits.
This
 is probably a main reason why it has been promoted so much, especially in developing countries. Foreign tourists contribute to the economy of the host country with the money they spent on a wide range of goods and services including food, local crafts, accommodation and travel.
This
, in turn, can provide much- needed employment for people. If oversea visitors
are charged
Suggestion
are charging
charge
 more than local people for visiting tourist destination, they can be discouraged considering
this
 scheme as an unfair approach.
Therefore
, in my opinion, governments should charge the same fee from both international tourists and local visitors. At the same time, tourism gives the locality a chance to show itself off and raise its profile in the world. If visitors are treated satisfactorily they can encourage their immediate friends and family members to visit a country and some tourist attractions meaning that higher income is gained which can be spent on
preserving
Suggestion
Preserving
, maintaining, and regenerating the environment in both urban and rural settings. To take France as an example, international tourists visited the Eiffel Tower are charged the same price no matter what nationality they are, and
this
 helps to promote the nation’s cultural heritage. From
this
 perspective, having an equal entrance fee has a better impact. In conclusion, I believe that local and international tourists should pay equally when they visit tourist attractions. It would be counterproductive to make them pay more than local residents.
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